Oh my, you have told us a whole story in less than 44 words! Bravo to you! And in my opinion you should NOT touch one word of what you have done to fit an proscribed form. These are the word that the Universe gave to you and you should honor and respect that gift and leave this as is – in my opinion! It is a verbal masterpiece!!! It’s the heart of a Fred Astaire and Ginger Rogers movie! You deserve a Standing Ovation!
This is such an elegantly worded piece that captures all the elements of a great story, love lost, broken hearts and sadness and who knows what’s next?? Oh yes, so when is the sequel due to be released? LOL! Your words paint the most exquisite image (your artwork was perfect) of how it feels to go through a heart break.
The good news that is related to this sad and melancholy scene is where she will be in the future. Please read my post “Thank You for Leaving Me”. Please consider doing a series with this as the opening piece and then moving us through the recovery step by step with the same excellence as you accomplished here! Bellissimo, Bellissimo!!!
Your poem is so worthy of high praise as is it’s Author!! Yes, you bet I want to encourage you to do a series! Don’t you hear all your followers cheering for More??? Ha! Be sure and give us a distribution date and let us know when the movie is coming out! LOL!!
I’m glad you liked “Thank you for leaving me”. It takes awhile to get to that point. I really appreciate you spending time with me there! I read your work “Apathy” and loved it! You have really hooked me on your works and the heart and soul of the Author who can create such beautiful creations. You have a great eye, wordsmithing skills and a tender and sensitive heart and a wonderful way of melding them all together into a beautiful painting with words that touches our hearts!!
I must warn you that I have acquired the skills needed to do Back Catalogging! Don’t tempt me to turn them on YOU! LOL!! See my post on back catalogging Tanya Cliff.
Just Reblogged this piece!! Tried last night but the reblog function got stuck in a loop?? FYI for any short works that you post in the future – Use the “Read More” button after the first four lines or so (in this case right after your artwork) before you publish and this will cut off what people see and force them to click through to your post instead of being able to read the whole work without clicking. You are losing visits if you don’t do this.
I would suggest that you might want to edit “Harmony” to include the “Read More” message after your artwork even now. If you check out the reblog on my blog you will see that the whole work is visible without having to click through to your blog.
I hope you get lots of visits.
Thanks again for this Super poem. It hit me hard! And the release date for the sequel is When??? LOL!
A ghostwriter??? Hmm! Had never thought of that but you might want to check out my two posts – “Allie’s Song To Noah” and “Allie’s Note To Noah” both fantasy take offs on “The Notebook”. The set ups were written by me. Great movie! Have you seen it?
Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet and commented:
I want to thank my ever growing family of followers for supporting my blog. It is one of my great joys to meet so many new and wonderful writers and friends from all over the world!!
I always love it when I can share something that seems wonderful to me with all of you. So, let me introduce you to Storyteller. Please Welcome a new friend and wonderful writer!!
We will be taking a look at her very moving poem “Harmony”. But before we do I would like you to know a little more about her in her own words – I think I will try and get her to license this to me to use also – I Love it.
Please check out Storyteller’s blog!!
They say “Life’s a journey”
I don’t know its true purpose but what I know for sure— it would be nothing without the people in it.
If you are reading this, you’re part of my journey.
My writings are a reflection of my thoughts, experiences, trials, learnings, moments of realisation and belief system.
________________________________________
‟To see the World in a Grain of Sand
And Heaven in a Flower
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour”
________________________________________
~Thank you for reading my stories, I hope you find them worthy of your Time~
This is so moving, a bittersweet moment that evokes memories in so many of us. Your words stir emotions, feelings, memories… Signs of a great writer 🙂 Thank you for all that your writing brings out in me. I can only hope and strive to write this way…
Oh this is beautiful! Thank you for sharing your creativity – it inspires me 🙂
You are welcome to contribute a poem to Forgiving Fridays if you’d like to! It’s a new project I’m working on to invite followers (and anyone on wordpress!) to share forgiveness. You can do it any day this week & just include a pingback to my post. Here’s the link to my latest one if helpful: https://forgivingconnects.com/2017/05/12/todays-forgiving-fridays-an-honest-look-at-myself/
I really enjoy your blog. Have a great day ❤
Blessings, Debbie
Beautiful.
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Thank you 🙂
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The heart that is broken in love lose harmony with everyone! A full tale in few words! Beautiful!
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Thanks that was the idea; to tell a tale
xx Storyteller
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So rich in emotion!
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Thank you 🙂
xx Storyteller
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Wow. The ultimate tragedy. Seeing the one you love genuinely happy with someone else.
That was short and beautiful.
Cheers,
CRD
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Agreed it’s heartwrenching, thanks for reading!
xx Storyteller
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Loved this tiny tale..💓💓
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Thanks Jeni ☺️
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simple but beautiful cause there is emotion bursting out of it
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hello and welcome to my blog, glad you liked it 🙂
xx Storyteller
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🙂
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I like how you described the loss of a broken relationship.
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Thank you, appreciate it!
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A lovely poem…but not a quadrille (44 words) to fit dVerse links.
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My bad! i thought it meant anything within 44 words.
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Love it… but a little outside the definition of a quadrille… maybe you can expand it to be exactly 44 words.
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Hey, thanks for reading and sorry about the confusion I missed the quadrille part!
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There is a new Quadrille every second week… so there is plenty of chances *smiles*
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Count me “IN” 🙂
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Oh my, you have told us a whole story in less than 44 words! Bravo to you! And in my opinion you should NOT touch one word of what you have done to fit an proscribed form. These are the word that the Universe gave to you and you should honor and respect that gift and leave this as is – in my opinion! It is a verbal masterpiece!!! It’s the heart of a Fred Astaire and Ginger Rogers movie! You deserve a Standing Ovation!
This is such an elegantly worded piece that captures all the elements of a great story, love lost, broken hearts and sadness and who knows what’s next?? Oh yes, so when is the sequel due to be released? LOL! Your words paint the most exquisite image (your artwork was perfect) of how it feels to go through a heart break.
The good news that is related to this sad and melancholy scene is where she will be in the future. Please read my post “Thank You for Leaving Me”. Please consider doing a series with this as the opening piece and then moving us through the recovery step by step with the same excellence as you accomplished here! Bellissimo, Bellissimo!!!
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grazie Amico Mio for the kind words and encouragement. It’s quite Humbling!
A series seems like a great idea, I should start working on that pronto 🙂
‘Thank u for leaving me’ was wonderful, here’s something that is on similar lines https://storiesto.wordpress.com/2017/04/06/apathy/
Until then hope you enjoy reading all my posts.
xx Storyteller
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Your poem is so worthy of high praise as is it’s Author!! Yes, you bet I want to encourage you to do a series! Don’t you hear all your followers cheering for More??? Ha! Be sure and give us a distribution date and let us know when the movie is coming out! LOL!!
I’m glad you liked “Thank you for leaving me”. It takes awhile to get to that point. I really appreciate you spending time with me there! I read your work “Apathy” and loved it! You have really hooked me on your works and the heart and soul of the Author who can create such beautiful creations. You have a great eye, wordsmithing skills and a tender and sensitive heart and a wonderful way of melding them all together into a beautiful painting with words that touches our hearts!!
I must warn you that I have acquired the skills needed to do Back Catalogging! Don’t tempt me to turn them on YOU! LOL!! See my post on back catalogging Tanya Cliff.
xx TheReluctantPoet oo
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I’m honestly flattered and honoured that you would even consider Back Cataloging my blog.
“On top of the world” 💃
About the movie, i have so many ideas i could use a ghostwriter 🙂
xx Storyteller
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Just Reblogged this piece!! Tried last night but the reblog function got stuck in a loop?? FYI for any short works that you post in the future – Use the “Read More” button after the first four lines or so (in this case right after your artwork) before you publish and this will cut off what people see and force them to click through to your post instead of being able to read the whole work without clicking. You are losing visits if you don’t do this.
I would suggest that you might want to edit “Harmony” to include the “Read More” message after your artwork even now. If you check out the reblog on my blog you will see that the whole work is visible without having to click through to your blog.
I hope you get lots of visits.
Thanks again for this Super poem. It hit me hard! And the release date for the sequel is When??? LOL!
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I think it’s a great idea and the sequel should be out SOON 🤔
(Note to self: i hope ur reading this)
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A ghostwriter??? Hmm! Had never thought of that but you might want to check out my two posts – “Allie’s Song To Noah” and “Allie’s Note To Noah” both fantasy take offs on “The Notebook”. The set ups were written by me. Great movie! Have you seen it?
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Seriously what girl hasn’t seen the notebook? It’s one of my go-to romantic movies 🙂
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This is soo beautiful ❤️
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thank you Sanaa and welcome to my blog 🙂
do check out the other posts.
xx Storyteller
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet and commented:
I want to thank my ever growing family of followers for supporting my blog. It is one of my great joys to meet so many new and wonderful writers and friends from all over the world!!
I always love it when I can share something that seems wonderful to me with all of you. So, let me introduce you to Storyteller. Please Welcome a new friend and wonderful writer!!
We will be taking a look at her very moving poem “Harmony”. But before we do I would like you to know a little more about her in her own words – I think I will try and get her to license this to me to use also – I Love it.
Please check out Storyteller’s blog!!
They say “Life’s a journey”
I don’t know its true purpose but what I know for sure— it would be nothing without the people in it.
If you are reading this, you’re part of my journey.
My writings are a reflection of my thoughts, experiences, trials, learnings, moments of realisation and belief system.
________________________________________
‟To see the World in a Grain of Sand
And Heaven in a Flower
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour”
________________________________________
~Thank you for reading my stories, I hope you find them worthy of your Time~
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Did You take a look at Allie’s Song To Noah and Allie’s Note To Noah? I love the Notebook. I tear up every time!!
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yes it’s beautiful!
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So, are you up for a little dare/challenge? You can contact me at chucklindholm@hotmail.com and talk about it if you want to try?
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you’ve got mail! 🙂
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Are You up for a test run??? The Sandman has come for me and I’m late! Let me know if You are a little daring!
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Oh, so beautiful. Anyway, came here to leave my thanks for your recent kind decision to follow Learning from Dogs. Thank you!
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Thanks a lot for dropping by 🙂
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Like a knife through my heart. I can feel the pain.
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Thanks for reading Susan sending hugs to heal u ❤ 🙂
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This is so moving, a bittersweet moment that evokes memories in so many of us. Your words stir emotions, feelings, memories… Signs of a great writer 🙂 Thank you for all that your writing brings out in me. I can only hope and strive to write this way…
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thank u Walt ur too kind!
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Oh this is beautiful! Thank you for sharing your creativity – it inspires me 🙂
You are welcome to contribute a poem to Forgiving Fridays if you’d like to! It’s a new project I’m working on to invite followers (and anyone on wordpress!) to share forgiveness. You can do it any day this week & just include a pingback to my post. Here’s the link to my latest one if helpful: https://forgivingconnects.com/2017/05/12/todays-forgiving-fridays-an-honest-look-at-myself/
I really enjoy your blog. Have a great day ❤
Blessings, Debbie
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Very moving post. Provoked thought.
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Short, sad, bitter sweet 🙂
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